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Dark S3cret
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Number of posts : 458
Age : 31
Registration date : 2009-01-17
|  Subject: Remember and Forgot Mon Nov 23, 2009 11:31 pm | |
| You wanted to catch that moment in open hands
As if the sands of time could be held and not slip
Between your fingers, as if you really could just
Hold it forever so you wouldn’t have to remember
And realize what you forgot.
A/N: This poem was used on the arts page of last year's yearbook. | |
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Traverse Writer
Number of posts : 114
Age : 32
Registration date : 2009-01-22
| | Subject: Re: Remember and Forgot Tue Nov 24, 2009 8:37 pm | |
| GOD! O.o That was awesome! I wish I could write short poems that well or quotes or whatamachcallit... XD I use them for the beginning of my chaptires (chapters). I really don't see any mistakes or grammar or stuff... However, I do realize it's a poem. But dont' poems have periods in them, or else it looks like a really really long sentence. Feel free to shoot me if I'm wrong.  | |
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Dark S3cret
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Number of posts : 458
Age : 31
Registration date : 2009-01-17
| | Subject: Re: Remember and Forgot Tue Nov 24, 2009 8:39 pm | |
| Nah. They don't have to have periods in them.
The thing with poetry is that it's totally up to you to take whatever artistic liberty you want with them. LIKE NO PUNCTUATION.
Maybe in like, traditionnal poetry punctuation was required, but I think poetry has evolved. | |
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Dark S3cret
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Number of posts : 458
Age : 31
Registration date : 2009-01-17
| | Subject: Re: Remember and Forgot Tue Nov 24, 2009 8:39 pm | |
| But thanks for the comment? | |
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Traverse Writer
Number of posts : 114
Age : 32
Registration date : 2009-01-22
| | Subject: Re: Remember and Forgot Tue Nov 24, 2009 8:51 pm | |
| No problem.
Just doing my job. *gets shot* Like the hell, I am. XD
But, I envy your writing and grammar skills. Mine gets butchered up so many times I could could cry tears of blood... And that's scary. O.o | |
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Dark S3cret
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Number of posts : 458
Age : 31
Registration date : 2009-01-17
| | Subject: Re: Remember and Forgot Tue Nov 24, 2009 8:54 pm | |
| .... LIKE A VAMPIRE.
Lol. Thank you? | |
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Traverse Writer
Number of posts : 114
Age : 32
Registration date : 2009-01-22
| | Subject: Re: Remember and Forgot Tue Nov 24, 2009 8:58 pm | |
| *eep!*
I'M NOT A VAMPIRE!!
But, whatever. At least, I'm not labelled as a druggie. *hiss* | |
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Dark S3cret
Admin
Number of posts : 458
Age : 31
Registration date : 2009-01-17
| | Subject: Re: Remember and Forgot Tue Nov 24, 2009 8:59 pm | |
| .... And I am.... ? D: *is offended* | |
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Traverse Writer
Number of posts : 114
Age : 32
Registration date : 2009-01-22
| | Subject: Re: Remember and Forgot Tue Nov 24, 2009 9:01 pm | |
| OH, HELL NO!!  Not you...me. Not that I am a druggie... TT_TT I AIN'T INTO DRUGS!! DRUGS ARE BADD!!! Apparently people at my old school thought I was one since I didn't wear girly clothes or make-up or because of my bad sleeping habits giving me dark circles... So, yeah...the story of my life. >> | |
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MinglerX
Number of posts : 80
Age : 30
Registration date : 2009-02-17
| | Subject: Re: Remember and Forgot Wed Nov 25, 2009 1:45 pm | |
| I really, really like this. It made me go wow.  | |
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Dark S3cret
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Number of posts : 458
Age : 31
Registration date : 2009-01-17
| | Subject: Re: Remember and Forgot Wed Nov 25, 2009 6:35 pm | |
| I love making you go wow.  | |
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