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MinglerX

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PostSubject: Time   Time EmptyMon Sep 21, 2009 4:56 pm

A clock
Tic-toc, tic-toc;
Counting down the minutes, the seconds, all day
'Til people and flowers and all is decayed.

'Til I'm wrapped up in mist,
And melting away,
And all whom I know
Have left from this fray.

Tic-toc, tic-toc
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Dark S3cret


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PostSubject: Re: Time   Time EmptyWed Oct 07, 2009 6:08 pm

I like the idea of time -- and always find it to be a very intriguing, endlessly fascinating thing to try and portray in writing -- and any art, really.

I'm not sure if you were following a rhyming scheme?... b/c I feel like some of the words are off, whether you were or not.

LOVED this line:

'Til I'm wrapped up in mist,
And melting away,
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MinglerX

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PostSubject: Re: Time   Time EmptyThu Oct 08, 2009 5:48 pm

I neeeever follow rhyming schemes. And when I try, it always goes really badly. It's something I need to work on. Razz I wrote this a long time ago... I'm interested in the concept of time, too. I might use a little bit of this and make a cultural song to throw into a novel some time in the future...
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