Number of posts : 80 Age : 30 Registration date : 2009-02-17
Subject: Time Mon Sep 21, 2009 4:56 pm
A clock Tic-toc, tic-toc; Counting down the minutes, the seconds, all day 'Til people and flowers and all is decayed.
'Til I'm wrapped up in mist, And melting away, And all whom I know Have left from this fray.
Tic-toc, tic-toc
Dark S3cret Admin
Number of posts : 458 Age : 31 Registration date : 2009-01-17
Subject: Re: Time Wed Oct 07, 2009 6:08 pm
I like the idea of time -- and always find it to be a very intriguing, endlessly fascinating thing to try and portray in writing -- and any art, really.
I'm not sure if you were following a rhyming scheme?... b/c I feel like some of the words are off, whether you were or not.
LOVED this line:
'Til I'm wrapped up in mist, And melting away,
MinglerX
Number of posts : 80 Age : 30 Registration date : 2009-02-17
Subject: Re: Time Thu Oct 08, 2009 5:48 pm
I neeeever follow rhyming schemes. And when I try, it always goes really badly. It's something I need to work on. I wrote this a long time ago... I'm interested in the concept of time, too. I might use a little bit of this and make a cultural song to throw into a novel some time in the future...