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PostSubject: If A Mockingbird Don't Sing   Sat Mar 13, 2010 12:58 am

If A Mockingbird Don’t Sing


If a mockingbird don’t sing, ‘cause it ain’t to be.
No salvation for anything, except in my dreams.
I’m telling you this, don’t you know what is free?
Restless nightmares are everywhere it seems.

In this world, there’s many things to tell,
But I’m going to see the bright blue sky.
Whether or not, I’ll stay true as well
In this life of mine, I’ll be sure to get by.

Only if my friends didn’t die,
I wouldn’t be so lonely, oh why,
Is every day is a struggle to try?
This is when you start to cry...


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Okay, I should probably explain... Shocked

I'm sick and when I'm sick my head thinks of weird, creepy stuff, hence the creepiness of these lyrics/this poem. Uhh, beats me. Neutral But I was trying to convey an emotion of a new character of mine (I'm heading for the deep end of Sick & Twistedness, in my opinion, then again I've may have already dived in...). On an interesting note, I was singing this to the tune of "Mama's going to buy you a Mockingbird" and gosh! pale It was scary how well this went with the melody.

I may have killed a beloved childhood song with this... Crying or Very sad

Comments? Concerns? pale
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PostSubject: Re: If A Mockingbird Don't Sing   Sat Mar 13, 2010 5:07 pm

Is there a mistake in the penultimate line?
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PostSubject: Re: If A Mockingbird Don't Sing   Mon Mar 15, 2010 10:52 pm

Deleted repeated word? is.
Wow, I sound like Microsoft Word. Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: If A Mockingbird Don't Sing   Thu Mar 18, 2010 8:58 pm

@ Owle Gray
Penulitmate line? ?_? Confusing, I have to look up this word.

@ Angela
(laughs) No, seriously where's the repeated word so I can delete it?



I say this has been awkweird (yay, new word, MINE!)
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PostSubject: Re: If A Mockingbird Don't Sing   Thu Mar 18, 2010 10:20 pm

"Is every day is a struggle to try?"

Double 'is'?
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