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PostSubject: Who Am I?   Thu Jan 29, 2009 4:59 pm

WHO AM I?


Who am I?
But a writer,
An artist in weaving words,
from a dream into a reality

Who am I?
But a tomboy with very big dreams for reality
Who is tired of not able to hear everything,
but heeds her heart’s wishes and dreams?

Who am I?
But a believer in dreams and in words
I live within my very own kingdom of my ideals inside my own little world
Where paper glide faraway from the land over the ocean
And words fill the seas and ev’ry room is filled with books,
Where dreamers and believers can dance on water endlessly

Who am I?
But a dreamer who dreams endlessly of new tomorrows,
And fearing nothing that threatens my dreams and beliefs.
An unforgiver of those who hurt and bully,
And who scar and injure the innocent

Who am I?
But myself, my only
With shy and observant eyes that are fierce and never wavers
Hair that is short and boyish
Scars reflected on one’s heart
Never to be seen by anyone else other than you.

I, myself am,
A shining pearl from the burrowing sliver clam to the breathing ashes of a dying fire
That is who I am
Now and forever



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PostSubject: Re: Who Am I?   Sat Jan 31, 2009 12:21 am

... Megan, right? =] That's who you are.

This has a nice tone, a sorrowful feel. Very introspective. Your metaphors are very pretty. =]

Because it's a free-verse poem, I can't really comment too much upon the structure, asides from my own aesthetic preferences... I like it when the lines look about the same length. But maybe you could have the same number of syllables per line. Or perhaps an iambic pentameter?

Or you can just leave it.
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PostSubject: Re: Who Am I?   Wed Feb 04, 2009 5:04 pm

Angela, I usually do that, but this time it proved rather hard and I was kind of "in the moment" when writing so I can't really control it. Let's just say I was hit with inspiration and it flowed til it could no more. But I do write poems like you said, just at random times I don't, so please don't blame me. pale
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PostSubject: Re: Who Am I?   Wed Feb 04, 2009 7:36 pm

Why would I blame you?

I was just stating my preferences. You're free to write poetry in any shape or form (and subject matter) without having to worry about what I think. XD
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